Encouragement, Writing

How to Murder a Draft, Resurrect A Better Story



Do you ever want to throw your work in progress away? Chuck the manuscript you’ve worked on for years?

If you’re a writer, you’ve been there and done that.

The last few months I’ve taken writing classes with an editor, Toni Lopopolo and her assistant, Lisa Angle. We’re a small group of writers who brave the weekly sessions with Toni and Lisa so we can become better writers.

I’ve learned I must swing a machete through a draft to become a better writer.

Wield your writing machete like Danny Trejo

Machete-wielding is a dirty job. You must be merciless. This will hurt, but it’s for your own good.

These tips will help you murder your draft:

  1. Pluck out backstory in the first pages.
  2. Delete the flowery prose that serves no purpose. This includes adverbs and -ing words.
  3. Hack out the ‘terrible 20‘ words that result in the passive voice.
  4. Throw away the ‘filler words.‘ They’re the excess fat.
  5. Cut out the numerous body parts “Her head swiveled,” “eyes squinted,” “eyebrows arched.”
  6. Take out stage directions disguised as physical movements.
  7. Remove events that don’t affect the goal. Either it doesn’t belong or the writer hasn’t communicated its importance.
  8. Slash the conversational dialogue.

These tips can revive your murdered or half-dead draft:

  1. Read “Self-Editing for Fiction Writers,” by Renni Browne and Dave King, before you start your revisions.
  2. The story must start on the first page.
  3. Write in scenes. A scene has a beginning, middle, and end (mini-arc). Each scene must drive the story forward. Tips on how to write a scene.
  4. Events, characters, description all must mean something. Remember Chekov’s gun?
  5. Enter a scene with the story already in motion, then leave early with an important outcome left hanging.
  6. Put a comma before ‘said,’ and a period before or after an action.
  7. Add danger and desire for drama or tension.
  8. Pump in great dialogue that’s confrontational, with opposing agendas. This drives the story forward.

Check out Toni’s website and find many more tips.

I enjoyed this presentation: The Most Important Writing Skill to Master and ‘What is Voice.”

Thanks for reading, double thanks for sharing this post. 🙂





books on writing, Writing

A Few Books on the Craft of Writing

Stephen King quote on writing
Stephen King, “On Writing.”
     On one of my early writer’s group retreats, our group leader brought in the book “On Writing” by Stephen King. I’m a horror wuss, so I don’t read or watch horror material, the lasting effect of seeing “The Exorcist”  when I was a teenager. My horror prejudice worked against me; I had never read King’s book, “On Writing,” published in 2000.
     During our free time at the retreat, I picked up the book and skimmed through the first part, which talked about his early attempts at writing, the rejection letters, and his problems with drugs and alcohol. I don’t believe the latter was the result of the former. 
     Section Two contains practical advice on the craft of writing. He gives tips on idea development, characters, editing, and the use of adverbs (stay far away from them). This was helpful; he provided his original version of “The Hotel Story” and then showed his revisions. It’s a good book that offers an exciting story about a fascinating writer.
     King recommends “The Elements of Style” by Strunk and White. It’s been around so long that there is a 50th Edition; it’s sometimes called the bible for good writing and all things grammar. It’s written in a direct no holds barred style. You probably used this book in high school or college if you were lucky enough to have a good English teacher. It’s a keeper. 
     Now, between the styles of King and S&W, you’ll find Anne Lamott’s “Bird by Bird.” She starts giving you sound advice right in the beginning. She quotes her father telling her 10-year-old brother, who is lamenting about a project he procrastinated on, to take it “bird by bird.” Start small and take it one piece at a time. 
     Ms. Lamott has a sense of style and wit that makes for easy reading, even though she does give you assignments in the book. Her perspective on character and plot is exciting and well worth reading. A valuable contribution I often thought of when I worked on my first novel is “Shitty First Drafts.” I read that chapter and thought, ‘hot damn,’ she (a famous author) has given me permission to have a crummy first draft. I can write several pages (really only two-it’s the Virgo in me) before I feel the pull to self-edit.
     The last two books are what I should have purchased before I began writing. I could have saved time, stress, and premature and embarrassing submission to a writer’s class. The first book is “Sol Stein on Writing,” by who else but SS, and “Self-Editing for Fiction Writers” by Renni Brown and Dave King. There is too much information about Stein’s book; it’s over 300 pages but worth reading.
Mine is dogeared, highlighted, and sprouting pink and green Post-It Page Markers. “Self-Editing,” is valuable reading and re-reading. The chapter on the point of view, which I struggle with, is smudged with my fingerprints and tears. 
     I’ve read a couple of more books on writing: James Frey’s (not the one that was on the big O) “How to Write a Damn Good Novel,” and one of my favorites (from the 99 cents store) “Elmore Leonard’s 10 Rules of Writing.” It has excellent illustrations and was a fantastic buy. 
     Whatever you find on the craft of writing, the point is to read, read, and then read some more until you find a book that is understandable, memorable, and hopefully bargain-priced. Or you can go to your next writing group and swap or trade books. Someone might have the 2000 Stephen King “Book on Writing” and is willing to swap; after all, the 10th Anniversary Edition just came out in July 2010. Or you can treat yourself and buy your own.